1. Posted: February 15, 2022In:

    When the parents are detained by weather abroad, a man-child elder brother must take charge of his dysfunctional family’s Christmas customs.

    Richiev Singularity

    Your logline isn't bad, however, I would personalize 'the parents' with, 'his parents' or 'their parents' Here is an attempt at a re-write: ----- "When his parent's flight is delayed, a man-child elder brother must take charge of his dysfunctional family's Christmas." ------ Hope that helped

    Your logline isn’t bad, however, I would personalize ‘the parents’ with, ‘his parents’ or ‘their parents’

    Here is an attempt at a re-write:
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    “When his parent’s flight is delayed, a man-child elder brother must take charge of his dysfunctional family’s Christmas.”
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    Hope that helped

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  2. Posted: February 14, 2022In:

    When a climate activist with low self-esteem learns the new mayor will turn their experimental eco-metropolis into a foreign trade capital, she mobilizes a citizen eco-force to protect this Shangri-La. She fails, but ends up birthing a global sustainability revolution in which she’s the new leader.

    Richiev Singularity

    You shouldn't give away the ending in the logline.

    You shouldn’t give away the ending in the logline.

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  3. Posted: February 11, 2022In:

    Annie helps Adrian, an introverted boy, to build confidence to approach the girl he likes. Little does she know that the girl in question is actually her.

    Richiev Singularity

    -Or- “When she discovers her introverted friend has a secret crush, the most popular girl in school makes it her mission to help him gain the confidence he needs, unaware that his dream girl is her.”

    -Or-
    “When she discovers her introverted friend has a secret crush, the most popular girl in school makes it her mission to help him gain the confidence he needs, unaware that his dream girl is her.”

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