1. Posted: April 17, 2018In:

    A high school student inherits supernatural powers and becomes a vigilante as he attempts to save the rainy city of Seattle from becoming a fiery hell.

    Richiev Singularity

    Who is he saving the city from?

    Who is he saving the city from?

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  2. Posted: April 17, 2018In:

    After crime rate falls to zero, a lonely detective turns into a serial killer to challenge his fellow detectives.

    Richiev Singularity

    I agree with dpg;?you can have a lead character as bad as you want, but you must give them a motivation that the audience will relate to. Killing out of boredom is not really a compelling reason to want a lead character to succeed. It might be good if the person doing the killing was the bad guy andRead more

    I agree with dpg;?you can have a lead character as bad as you want, but you must give them a motivation that the audience will relate to.
    Killing out of boredom is not really a compelling reason to want a lead character to succeed.
    It might be good if the person doing the killing was the bad guy and you made one of the detectives out to?stop him the protagonist.
    But that would be a completely different logline.

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  3. Posted: April 16, 2018In:

    When a deranged brother suddenly kidnaps his younger teenage sister, she must decide whether to awaken or resist her own sadistic urges to survive without becoming a killer herself.

    Richiev Singularity

    Because of how short loglines are, it helps to stick to the perspective of one character."When she is kidnapped by her brother, a terrified girl must..."I am unclear what she must do; in your logline she must make a choice but the story would be what she does after that choice.

    Because of how short loglines are, it helps to stick to the perspective of one character.

    “When she is kidnapped by her brother, a terrified girl must…”

    I am unclear what she must do; in your logline she must make a choice but the story would be what she does after that choice.

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