1. Posted: December 24, 2017In:

    A Rescue Story

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    Richiev Singularity

    This is short enough you could probably add a detail or two. by detail I mean, does he have to find some magical armor? or a dragon killing bow? or scale an unscaleable mountain or train with a reclusive warrior? Also, you should begin your logline with the incident that sets the story in motion. BuRead more

    This is short enough you could probably add a detail or two. by detail I mean, does he have to find some magical armor? or a dragon killing bow? or scale an unscaleable mountain or train with a reclusive warrior?

    Also, you should begin your logline with the incident that sets the story in motion.

    But other than that I get the gist of the story from your short but to the point logline.

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  2. Posted: December 21, 2017In:

    tittle:_” impenetrable” the desperate high school teacher kidnap his student and ask her family huge amount of money for his only daughter for cancer diagnosis

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    Richiev Singularity

    In a logline it's better, to begin with, what sets the story in motion rather than end with it. "When his daughter contracts cancer, a desperate?teacher..."

    In a logline it’s better, to begin with, what sets the story in motion rather than end with it.

    “When his daughter contracts cancer, a desperate?teacher…”

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  3. Posted: December 23, 2017In:

    After years of isolation, an egotistic ex-cop makes his nostalgic return to re-unite with his daughter but not until he goes to war with a mob of ex-convicts.

    Richiev Singularity

    You might want to be specific?as to what isolation? Was he in prison? did he move to a small cabin in Alaska? Was he abducted?by aliens and held in a human zoo? A two or three word specific is better than a one-word vague statement.

    You might want to be specific?as to what isolation? Was he in prison? did he move to a small cabin in Alaska? Was he abducted?by aliens and held in a human zoo?

    A two or three word specific is better than a one-word vague statement.

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