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After a homeless toddler sells his beloved cuddly toy for millions of dollars and lives a life like a king with hundreds of toys, he realizes that money is not the same as happiness, so he goes out to find the owner to get his toy back.
Backstory: The family of the new toy owner is mega rich and their spoiled child wanted the cuddly toy so badly that they offered the toddler millions of dollars- so he couldn?t resist.
Backstory: The family of the new toy owner is mega rich and their spoiled child wanted the cuddly toy so badly that they offered the toddler millions of dollars- so he couldn?t resist.
See lessWhen two young men, one Israeli, one Palestinian, discover they were switched at birth, they struggle to come to terms with their dual identities and with their two families bitterly divided by? religion and history.
This premise sounds very fascinating. I immediately imagined watching a film like this and the drama of the two young men with different identities speaks for itself.If I had been the French director I had also been keen on doing a project based on this sole premise.? Plus, the conflict of PalestiniRead more
This premise sounds very fascinating. I immediately imagined watching a film like this and the drama of the two young men with different identities speaks for itself.
If I had been the French director I had also been keen on doing a project based on this sole premise.? Plus, the conflict of Palestinians and Israelis is always newsworthy.
I also like the structuring of the logline!
Thanks for introducing this, dpg!
See lessWhen an altruistic math geek finds her loved ones in financial hardship, she must use her newly-found ability of lottery prediction to turn their lives around risking her own as a mysterious criminal lottery boss wants her dead for ruining his superprofits.
I read your previous attempts and have to say this version is much better. First your structure. You have all the necessary ingredients: the inciting incident: "finds her loved ones in financial hardship", you have a clear goal "must use her lottery prediction to turn their lives around", and the anRead more
I read your previous attempts and have to say this version is much better.
See lessFirst your structure. You have all the necessary ingredients: the inciting incident: “finds her loved ones in financial hardship”, you have a clear goal “must use her lottery prediction to turn their lives around”, and the antagonist is the criminal lottery boss who wants to kill her.
That’s the first huge step in writing a good logline.
However, I’m not sure if financial hardship is enough in case of the stakes.
I get the financial point here, but I would go much further than that and write something like “bankruptcy” or “foreclosure” or maybe something along “protection money” if you want to write a thriller. That raises the stakes in a simple way.
Anyway, I’m curious to see what the others think of this.
I like it so far. Much better than the previous ones.
Maybe you can cut out the last few words.? 42 words is a little bit too long.