1. Posted: March 14, 2013In:

    A School-janitor finds out that the extreme pains he just started suffering is because of a young student made a Voodoo-doll in the spitting image of him. Now he must get his hands on the doll and protect it from harm before he dies trying.

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    Thanks for all the feedback =) Here's the revised version: "When a cocky, tenacious gym-teacher finds out that his random pains are caused by a Voodoo-doll, he must find the lovestruck, dimwitted student who created it to break the curse." What do you think? I realised one problem I had with the preRead more

    Thanks for all the feedback =)

    Here’s the revised version:
    “When a cocky, tenacious gym-teacher finds out that his random pains are caused by a Voodoo-doll, he must find the lovestruck, dimwitted student who created it to break the curse.”

    What do you think?
    I realised one problem I had with the previous one was that it wasn’t clear that it is suppose to be a comedy. Is that clearer now?

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  2. Posted: March 13, 2013In:

    When a prude housewife's perfect son goes missing, his secret life as a gigolo is revealed and the mother decides to pose as a prostitute in order to infiltrate the underground world and find out what happened to her son.

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    Thank you both so much for your comments :D I can definitely see what you're saying!

    Thank you both so much for your comments 😀 I can definitely see what you’re saying!

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