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A Lieutenant in a drug gang, misreads a situation killing his boss. This sparks an internal war eventually leading to the destruction of his gang, his death and the loss of their terroritary.
Yep - bad people are far, far more interesting.However - my best advice here is to make sure we have some empathy for this guy at the start/first 10 minutes.I mean... Tony Soprano - loved his family, right? Don Corleone too. Joker was bullied.You know what I'm saying. We probably won't stick aroundRead more
Yep – bad people are far, far more interesting.
However – my best advice here is to make sure we have some empathy for this guy at the start/first 10 minutes.
I mean… Tony Soprano – loved his family, right? Don Corleone too. Joker was bullied.
You know what I’m saying. We probably won’t stick around if he’s an out and out horrible person. We should at least understand why he’s an asshole – at least in the first 10.
Also – goes against Aristotle. A depraved horrible person who reaches a terrible end/undeserved misfortune. Basically – no one will care.
However – if it’s an intermediate hero with bad and good qualities who meets tragic end/undeserved misfortune. We’ll care. And it’ll hurt. And we’ll feel something. (I honestly reckon Don Corleone and Joker fit the bill here.)
This advice is more geared towards the read I think.
If you were a PT Anderson/Tarantino/already in the industry – you could probably get away with making him an out and out villain. Not as easy when you’re trying to get that script read.
Anyways – good luck!
See lessA teenage loner meets his first love during lucid dreams and will have to choose between dream and reality, to be awaken without her or to never wake up.
Only thing I?m struggling with is the stake part.Okay...Try answering these two:What is his intention? His objective? Make sure it's strong and clear.What is his obstacle? (Sounds like he has a ton of them but I'm curious to know what you think it is.) Make sure it's formidable.?I mean surely the stRead more
Only thing I?m struggling with is the stake part.
Okay…
Try answering these two:
What is his intention? His objective? Make sure it’s strong and clear.
What is his obstacle? (Sounds like he has a ton of them but I’m curious to know what you think it is.) Make sure it’s formidable.?
I mean surely the stakes would be that he loses her forever and ever and ever?
Or that perhaps his parents will commit him?
Perhaps if he doesn’t figure out a way to make her real – he’ll lose her?
Perhaps if he spends longer than a certain amount of time – he’ll be stuck in dreamland? (Nice little twist. Perhaps by the end – he chooses dreamland over reality. And in reality, he’s in a coma somewhere? Again – I don’t know what happens. I’m just playing with your idea ha.)
I mean these are just ideas…
What are your ideas here? What do you think the stakes are?
Don’t be afraid to be as bad as possible – we’re just playing and mucking about. ?Nothing’s concrete just yet.
The answer is always there.
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See lessA teenage loner meets his first love during lucid dreams and will have to choose between dream and reality, to be awaken without her or to never wake up.
Anyways, the logline??INTENTION: be with his dream girl.OBSTACLE: she exists only in his dreams. A huge, huge problem. In fact - there?s tons of problems here.A teenager falls for a girl who exists only in his dreams - and must figure out a way to be with her.So. I dunno. I?m curious to know what otRead more
Anyways, the logline??
INTENTION: be with his dream girl.
OBSTACLE: she exists only in his dreams. A huge, huge problem. In fact – there?s tons of problems here.
A teenager falls for a girl who exists only in his dreams – and must figure out a way to be with her.
So. I dunno. I?m curious to know what others think. If you need to add some stakes to that. (I honestly think the stakes almost seem innate here.)
Perhaps?
A teenager falls for a girl who exists only in his dreams – and must figure out a way to be with her, before his parents commit him.
My notes:
1. I?m not sure how necessary it is to characterise. He could just be a teenager.
2. Choosing between dreams and reality is certainly a good dilemma.?
3. Reminds me of Avatar. Perhaps Avatar meets Vanilla Sky? It has potential to be quite reality-bending, complex and philosophical. Regardless – it still works as a small, simple fairytale romance. (which is fine too.)
4. Sounds like the real problem is just?being with her.
5. I honestly reckon this is the best concept I?ve seen on here. (Certainly my favourite thus far. I’d watch it.) It’s got lots of potential. Lots of angles to approach it from. Curious to know what others think.
Good luck!
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