DPG – thank you for your reply.

Hmm – I’m wondering if it’s a better strategy to post a logline without explaining it later on. Obviously – the logline/concept/idea needs to do the heavy lifting. This is where you are exactly correct.

In response to your confusion. (Looking at what I wrote – it does sound horribly confusing.)

Now I?m confused. Who falls in love with who first? Does the girl fall in love with the guy first? Or does the guy with the girl first? Do they both realize it at the same time? Who owns the MPR (Midpoint reversal) beat?

They fall in love at the same time. They both own the MP beat.

And, frankly, based upon what I understand the story to be about, the black sheep sister now seems to be a more interesting character than the guy. One reason, is because she seems to have a more interesting dramatic dilemma.

Perhaps so – but it’s not her story. (This is why I feel perhaps I shouldn’t elaborate so much what happens and just let the logline do the talking.)

Also – as for my theory that there should be two loglines. This experience makes me wonder if one should have ONE solid logline throughout. I dunno – I’m learning by getting beaten up.

As always – thank you for your thoughts.

As for me, I’m either going to let this script cool off for a bit, then polish and send it off to my manager so she can tell me off or I’m going give it a lot of distance.

We’ll see.

(In fact – perhaps after the distance, I can be genuinely objective and attack the logline with new strength and gusto. We’ll see.)