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this is what you said last time…

At 32 words the logline has the basic elements:

An inciting incident: ?When he learns the one that got away is getting married,??
A protagonist with an objective goal:??a man sets about winning her back??
A strategy for achieving his objective goal: ??with the help of the fianc??s ex,??
And a midpoint plot twist:??only to fall for her as well.?

The midpoint plot twist is an element that distinguishes the project from ?My Best Friend?s Wedding? (1997) with which it will inevitably be compared. It also sets up an interesting dilemma for the protagonist and hints at his character flaw. Maybe his pursuit of the one who got away is a vanity project. Or maybe, like Shakespeare?s Romeo, he?s in love with being in love. Is either woman really the right one for him?

This is a movie I would like to see to find out the answers. Best wishes with your writing!

I’m guessing the fact that I’ve changed “fiance’s ex” to “resentful sister” – ?doesn’t turn you on. Have I changed the chemistry too much?

This reminds me of Goldman’s “Nobody knows anything” mantra ha. If right now, I were to post something that people loved, then post it again in six months, would people hate it? Who knows.

Nobody knows anything, right?

Is that exactly the reaction you want?? IOW:? what differentiates your movie idea from that movie ?? The alternate gender of the lead?? Or??

With this logline, it’s the fact they are sisters. It’s primal. The sister is a disgraced child star. A black sheep. She’s trying to get back at her perfect sister – and unexpectedly falls for this guy whilst she unexpectedly mends things with her sister.

The MP –?the sister’s dilemma, she realises she likes this guy, she realises she’s mending things with her sister – all whilst trying to undermine her sister’s wedding, and help this guy get back with her.?

Meanwhile, our hero is rose-coloured – and steadily falls for the imperfect black?sheep sister… The imperfect sister means hard work, commitment, responsibility. All the things he’s been terrified of this whole time.

(This is when you say, I should flip it and have the sister as the main protagonist. However – it is still the hero’s story – he is the one taking action. It is his story.)

Our hero has put up the soon-to-be-bride on a pedestal this whole time and steadily realises… they have nothing in common. He’s put her up on a pedestal because she’s unattainable and wrong for him and because he’s afraid of getting hurt. He’s delusional.

(But love is madness, right?)

So clearly, this is all heading towards disaster.

And love is blind. Blah blah blah.

Admittedly I could potentially revert back to the old logline – the sister is still the fiance’s ex. I honestly thought the sister angle was better. That’s the hook/twist. Aristotle. I’m keeping it in the family.

As opposed to two rose-coloured exes – it’s a bitter, resentful, disgraced child star sister trying to get back at her successful, beautiful, popular sister.

And the guy – he’s this workaholic anti-romantic who learns his ex is getting married, steadily turns into a quixotic romantic, then steadily lands back on earth when he accepts the cold, hard reality… he is genuinely love with the other one. The one who he previously despised. (It’s a rom com after all.)

The two rose-coloured exes angle reminded me of ADDICTED TO LOVE (with Meg Ryan).

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