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An ex-con trapped in an isolated house with the man who accidentally killed his wife – must pick a side when violent locals reach boiling point following a hit and run.
It's the dilemma that interests me...Kill an innocent man or defend a guilty one.In this version, Walt, a recluse, is actually guilty of killing Sam's wife in a car accident.Following this, Sam, a former soldier, his whole life goes off the rails...We first meet Sam after he's done time for accidentRead more
It’s the dilemma that interests me…
Kill an innocent man or defend a guilty one.
In this version, Walt, a recluse, is actually guilty of killing Sam’s wife in a car accident.
Following this, Sam, a former soldier, his whole life goes off the rails…
We first meet Sam after he’s done time for accidentally killing an aggressive drunk in a bar fight.
So… both cases of involuntary manslaughter.?
Anyways – the structure is the same, Sam is out to potentially kill Walt. He then falls for his protective, loyal sister.
A hit and run is the inciting incident here…
In this version, Walt is a far empathetic character – like Sam his whole like devastated and then ruled by a single defining incident. In his case, he can hardly go outside.
(Again, in this version, both incidents seem to be out of their hands. However – both men carry around a HUGE amount of doubt over what they did.)
I’m keeping doubt as a theme.
The death of Sam’s wife was a ripple effect that affected not only those two but the whole town around them.
Similarly, the hit-and-run is an echo of that event – and creates a similar ripple effect. However, it’s one that escalates and brings out the worst in everyone…
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Characters:Sam - The ex-con protagonist. A former soldier who served 10 years for manslaughter for killing the wrong man. Previously, the unsolved murder of his child led to the ruin of his marriage, life and up to the manslaughter. Returning home, he believes the killer might be... reformed paedophRead more
Characters:
Sam – The ex-con protagonist. A former soldier who served 10 years for manslaughter for killing the wrong man. Previously, the unsolved murder of his child led to the ruin of his marriage, life and up to the manslaughter. Returning home, he believes the killer might be… reformed paedophile and recluse, Walt.
Walt – A recluse of 10 years since he left prison. A self-hating man with suicidal tendencies. Throughout, he is evasive and inscrutable. There are moments he wants to be killed. He wants his sister to leave him alone – get on with her life, get married, have kids. He knows he’s wrecked her life just by being there.
Bev – Walt’s protective, ever-loyal sister. She carries the burden of living with her paedophile brother. His presence has thwarted relationships, suitors, and they’ve had to move several times. Bev wants Walt to get out the house, move on with his life and get a job.
Bill – the local drunk and moron. Sam’s co-worker (at a factory) and a former friend from his days as a hell-raiser. Bill’s daughter is found raped and murdered. The first person he goes after and harasses is Walt. (Also – he might be a local cop? We’ll see.)
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Central questions of the whole thing:
Is Sam going to kill this man? Did Walt murder anyone?
Paradigm:
I.I. – Bill’s daughter has been found raped and murdered. Sam, planning to kill Walt, finds Bev instead. (also – there’s foreshadowing of a storm coming.) Sam gets to know this man and begins having second thoughts. The doubt begins…
PP1 – Sam, at a crossroads, gets involved – defends Walt against violent locals. The rumour mill kicks into gear and Walt becomes a hated man…
MP – The house under seige. In self-defence and to protect his sister, Walt kills Bill’s cop brother. Now corrupt cops get involved. All during the town’s biggest rain storm.
PP2 – It becomes more and more likely that Walt actually is a murderer. Sam, genuinely caught between killing an innocent man or defending a guilty one.
Crisis Climax – I’ve got some ideas for this and I’m keeping that mysterious ha.
Sam putting a gun to Walt’s head is definitely a reversal that will happen as it’s been foreshadowed like crazy in Act 1 and in that moment will answer the central questions.
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See lessAn ex-con trapped in an isolated house with the paedophile he believes murdered his child ? must pick a side when violent locals reach boiling point following another unexplained murder.
Longer version:An ex-con trapped in an isolated house with the paedophile he believes murdered his child - must pick a side when town hysteria reaches boiling point following the murder of a local cop's daughter.(Far too many words here with this one. I'm hoping the one above sums it better.)I hopeRead more
Longer version:
An ex-con trapped in an isolated house with the paedophile he believes murdered his child – must pick a side when town hysteria reaches boiling point following the murder of a local cop’s daughter.
(Far too many words here with this one. I’m hoping the one above sums it better.)
I hope “town hysteria reaches boiling point” suggests a bloody battle and a house under seige by locals – otherwise I’ll have to find a better way of saying it ha.
How about…
An ex-con trapped in an isolated house with the paedophile he believes murdered his child – must pick a side when violent locals reach boiling point following another unexplained murder.?
(Okay – I’ve temporarily changed it. I think “violent locals” and “unexplained” murder is clearer.)
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