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A rookie Intelligence Officer accidentally risks a global incident, when she tries to replace the Foreign Minister of a hostile middle eastern country with an impostor: his secretly homosexual twin brother.
An Intelligence Officer replaces the Foreign Minister of a hostile middle eastern country with... his not-so-secret homosexual twin brother. - I chopped a lot of the padding. don't need the "tries to". I mean - he's gonna do it ha. Cut the imposter. You might need it. We'll see. I'm just playing aroRead more
An Intelligence Officer replaces the Foreign Minister of a hostile middle eastern country with… his not-so-secret homosexual twin brother.
– I chopped a lot of the padding. don’t need the “tries to”. I mean – he’s gonna do it ha. Cut the imposter. You might need it. We’ll see. I’m just playing around here.
– Hmm still feels like “Dave” crossed with a Sacha Baron Cohen film ha.
– Hopefully, “not-so-secret” suggests he’s very clearly gay but will in hilarious situations think it’s hidden.
– I agree with Dpg. You might need to push on the stakes.
– Concept has a fish-out-of-water which is good. I don’t think being gay is enough though. Perhaps he knows nothing about politics? Perhaps he’s a compulsive trouble maker? A drinker? How is this guy gonna make things worse?
Hmm – how about “his not-so-secret homosexual twin brother – a man with a voracious sexual appetite”.
or…
“his black sheep twin brother… a not-so-secret homosexual who loves to party.”
– Lastly, perhaps you need a “Then”? Then what happens? How does this guy cause trouble and mischief?
Anyways – play around with it. Experiment.
Nothing I say is gospel.
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I'd lose the 1926 LA (from the logline anyways). Managers/agents/producers find period stuff hard to market.Christmas stuff should do well though ha.A traveler who magically spreads joy to others searches for the family he thought lost centuries ago whilst an evil toy-maker stands in his way.- fromRead more
I’d lose the 1926 LA (from the logline anyways). Managers/agents/producers find period stuff hard to market.
Christmas stuff should do well though ha.
A traveler who magically spreads joy to others searches for the family he thought lost centuries ago whilst an evil toy-maker stands in his way.
– from first look that looks like it’s set during Christmas. Still feels quite half-baked. Half-realised.
You might want to do a quick overview on the characters (what they want, what stands in their way) and perhaps a synopsis. You don’t have to show it to us. It’s just for you to know.
The more you know – the greater the creative choices.
Play around and see what sticks.
Again – take what you need. Discard the rest.
Nobody here is perfect.
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Take what you need. Discard the rest. Nobody here is perfect. Just make sure you're writing what you want to see. Not someone else's idea.
Take what you need. Discard the rest.
Nobody here is perfect.
Just make sure you’re writing what you want to see. Not someone else’s idea.
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