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When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.
The character arc from shame to pride.
The character arc from shame to pride.
See lessWhen his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.
The character arc from shame to pride.
The character arc from shame to pride.
See lessRight before Christmas, a successful young Hollywood agent is fired from his job. Shame filled and arrogant, he is forced to spend the holiday with his family in New York City where he meets Melissa, a kind and beautiful young woman who unexpectedly pulls him out of his funk, helps him move on from his old job, and becomes the greatest Christmas miracle of the season.
Hi Youngwriter1547, I'll give this a go. There's a lot of ornamental here - lets try to lean it out a bit. INTENTION: ?? character doesn't seem to have a strong goal/intention. There's no real story until character has some kind of strong goal. OBSTACLE: ?? there's nothing really standing in his wayRead more
Hi Youngwriter1547,
I’ll give this a go. There’s a lot of ornamental here – lets try to lean it out a bit.
INTENTION: ?? character doesn’t seem to have a strong goal/intention. There’s no real story until character has some kind of strong goal.
OBSTACLE: ?? there’s nothing really standing in his way. Without an obstacle – there’s no conflict. No drama.
How about…
When he is forced to spend Christmas with his family, – the inciting incident.
a recently fired Hollywood agent,
must – – – ???? (goal/intention comes here.)
or else – – – ??? (what happens if he doesn’t? where’s the stakes?)
“Melissa, a kind and beautiful young woman who unexpectedly… ” – all this is ornamental. Not necessarily to the logline.
Notes –
– Perhaps make it “estranged” family. That will suggest he has some distance to travel. Some kind of arc.
Hope this helps.
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