Intriguing ? but a bit confusing. There?s a bit too much going on, and it?s hard to follow. i.e. ?once-skeptical occult historian?? ? what?s the point of her being ?once skeptical?? why not just skeptical? I guess it?s confusing because as she?s now an apparent expert in the occult surely she would no longer be that skeptical of such things..?

And what exactly is meant by ??cleanse her dead son?s soul???

I don?t think we need to know that the cop witnessed the ritual as a child (this is quite confusing, as ?he? could be construed to mean the protagonist?s dead son?)

And is it important that we must know that the legendary kung-fu master is a cop? As in, what relevance does that have to the story (I guess I could ask the same question as to what relevance a kung-fu master has to solving her problem..)?

Below is just my take ? good luck ? definitely interesting?

When a History professor is visited by the ghost of her dead son trapped in purgatory, she must track down a legendary kung-fu master who knows a ritual that can free the dead.?

Even if you are shooting for a bit of a farce in terms of plot/ character etc, I think the logline needs to be simplified and made clearer.

Best of luck.

If you are keen to keep the war veteran he needs to have a higher function other than just a buddy for the hero ? either it?s a double-hander and the kid and the veteran team up to kick some eight legged butt, or alternatively, the veteran is a hidden antagonist who is behind the infestation? (just an idea).

Below is a shot at the buddy angle (and with such a teaming you would have an implication of a ?coming of age? type scenario?):

An eleven year old entomology enthusiast and a ww2 veteran team up to save the residents of their apartment block from an infestation of man eating spiders.?

As others have said, I can?t see the link/ stakes of the kid having to save the war veteran over anyone else? there is no mention of them being connected in any way (yet?) ? as in, are they related, are they best friends? Is he the kid?s mentor? What makes the veteran so special to the kid?

I might be completely off with the whole ?monster in the house? angle? but that?s just what I see when I hear about spiders infesting an apartment block. If the spiders aren?t dangerous, then the implication from your logline is that the boys main struggle is to get the war veteran to LEAVE the apartment?How do you stretch that over 90 plus minutes?

Don’t mean to bug ya. 😉