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Three friends become entangled in a series of mind games as they argue over what they should do when a local Sheriff comes looking for the woman they find murdered in their isolated cabin
What about: 'When three close friends discover a murdered woman in their holiday cabin, friendships are thrown out the window when a nosey Sheriff turns up asking questions' ...just my play...
What about:
‘When three close friends discover a murdered woman in their holiday cabin, friendships are thrown out the window when a nosey Sheriff turns up asking questions’
…just my play…
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Hi wilsondownunder, I like this better, but 'grapple over what they should do' feels a passive/ think you could find something stronger... Including the Sheriff lifts the drama though. I do like the sound of it. Good luck!
Hi wilsondownunder,
I like this better, but ‘grapple over what they should do’ feels a passive/ think you could find something stronger… Including the Sheriff lifts the drama though. I do like the sound of it.
Good luck!
See lessSex , psychism and cigarettes. Oh my. A small town, southern girl migrates to the big city where she meets two professional women and begins a ritual of food, friendship, and betrayal; but when sudden memories of her past arise, she struggles to decide the best path to redemption.
HI phoenixx50, Pretty much what Andrew said -- It reads a bit like a tagline as opposed to a logline -- to avoid that it's a good idea to reveal specific events that propel the characters through the story, as well as specifics about the characters (or character) so we the readers know who this storRead more
HI phoenixx50,
Pretty much what Andrew said —
It reads a bit like a tagline as opposed to a logline — to avoid that it’s a good idea to reveal specific events that propel the characters through the story, as well as specifics about the characters (or character) so we the readers know who this story is about and what they have to do; i.e. state WHO these woman are (High School Teachers/ High School Clique now all grown-up/ Neighbors/ etc etc etc…) and what the main issue IS:
“Three young professional woman, a former High School clique, reunite after the death of their undeclared leader, and help each other through their own addictions to deal with each others grief.”
…nqr… but I hope that helps…
Best of luck.
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