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A peasant becomes soldier and decides to go to war in Sahara and fights alone because a man of authority snatches his first love. Rejected by death, a ghost suddenly appears to him, just to advise him to leave his place to find another love. When meets her ,both decide to get married but confronted by fierce and unpitiful rapist .
Still too long-winded -- for a logline you need to squeeze the essence of the story into ONE sentence if possible -- two at most: "A broken-hearted peasant with a death-wish joins an army in the Sahara, only to be confronted by a ghost that tells him he must save his one true love from a violent rapRead more
Still too long-winded — for a logline you need to squeeze the essence of the story into ONE sentence if possible — two at most:
“A broken-hearted peasant with a death-wish joins an army in the Sahara, only to be confronted by a ghost that tells him he must save his one true love from a violent rapist.”
…but this is still too long, and possibly not an accurate description of your story — but I hope it helps.
Good luck.
See lessWith the help of a mysterious new friend a recently widowed Father must traverse to a sinister world of dark magic to rescue his daughter from an all powerful queen.
What I had in mind was something quite dark -- the idea would be for the queen to take spiritual possession of the girl... maybe not entirely original, but I was seeing the main action with the father. You do make a very good point though. I do see it potentially fairy-talesque, there is a wicked quRead more
What I had in mind was something quite dark — the idea would be for the queen to take spiritual possession of the girl… maybe not entirely original, but I was seeing the main action with the father. You do make a very good point though. I do see it potentially fairy-talesque, there is a wicked queen after all… I’ll continue to mess around with it — well, until I hear back from the judges anyway… 😉
Thanks again for your, as always, well received feedback… and btw — I’ll be a few days on The Hunger Games… I ain’t seen it yet :0
See lessWhen a spoiled rich law student discovers one of his classmates is a cat burglar, she offers to set him up with his long-time crush in exchange for his silence.
Hi Paul, The meat of this film feels a bit misplaced -- as in, we have an intriguing idea in regards to the female cat burglar, but then, a not so interesting idea in terms of the date with the longtime crush... I'm assuming the rich law student is your protag, which makes the date with the crush hiRead more
Hi Paul,
The meat of this film feels a bit misplaced — as in, we have an intriguing idea in regards to the female cat burglar, but then, a not so interesting idea in terms of the date with the longtime crush… I’m assuming the rich law student is your protag, which makes the date with the crush his object of desire/ goal — and in comparison to a potential plot line involving a female law student cat burglar it loses big time.
And are you aiming for rom-com, crime-com, or a mixture of both? (OK — crime-com I’ve pulled from my ***, but you get my drift… I’m assuming a com of some sort… 😉 )
If the film isn’t written yet I think you could have a play with making the cat burglar the protagonist — just IMO.
Good luck with it.
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