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When a heartbroken man gets a number to long lost love, his brother steps in to stop him from facing a truth that would devastate him forever.
I think the logline still needs more clarifications. For instance, the "number", that's not explanatory enough. The major character i believe is the heartbroken man, in that case you should give him a clear goal, what he intends to achieve. Is he trying to contact the long lost love to renew the relRead more
I think the logline still needs more clarifications. For instance, the “number”, that’s not explanatory enough. The major character i believe is the heartbroken man, in that case you should give him a clear goal, what he intends to achieve. Is he trying to contact the long lost love to renew the relationship?. What made him heartbroken in the first place.Then i also think the long lost love should have a better description,probably a deceptive girlfriend, a selfish lover or something that will spur enough interest just like Cynosurer has just said.Make it generate more interest. In all it should be a good story when all these questions have been addressed particularly in the logline
See lessA naive young intelligence analyst is sent undercover in a group of rogue CIA agents – but as he falls for the glamor of their high-octane lifestyle, he starts to question who the real bad guys are…
Sounds interesting, but i will like to question why a naive intelligence officer would be sent on such a technical errand. If an experienced officer is assigned, then it would be more surprising that he got carried away or got confused in his assignment. i suggest you put the unexpected in the logliRead more
Sounds interesting, but i will like to question why a naive intelligence officer would be sent on such a technical errand. If an experienced officer is assigned, then it would be more surprising that he got carried away or got confused in his assignment. i suggest you put the unexpected in the logline, something that is a contrast to what should actually happen and all together, you will get the reader more interested in finding out how that could have happened. I can’t wait to go through your project. It appears like it’s going to be great fun.
See lessA teenage girl tries to stop her school teacher from marrying her mum after she mistakingly thought he kidnapped her missing father, not knowing it was his dangerous twin brother
Yes, thanks i think i will have to stick to the plot of the girl finding her kidnapped father. In this case, using Toastman and your suggestions, i wouldn't know if this sound better: "A devastated teenager discovers her missing father is kidnapped by her school teacher, not knowing it was the handiRead more
Yes, thanks i think i will have to stick to the plot of the girl finding her kidnapped father. In this case, using Toastman and your suggestions, i wouldn’t know if this sound better: “A devastated teenager discovers her missing father is kidnapped by her school teacher, not knowing it was the handiwork of his embittered identical twin brother.” Thanks for your time
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