1. Posted: January 7, 2013In:

    While being pursued by police and a protection team, David Porter must find the legendary Tony Bill to pay off a gambling debt; or he's dead

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    I think i like this alternative better. It's quite straight to the point

    I think i like this alternative better. It’s quite straight to the point

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  2. Posted: January 7, 2013In:

    While being pursued by police and a protection team, David Porter must find the legendary Tony Bill to pay off a gambling debt; or he's dead

    TX

    Sounds like fun, but i'm a little confused here. If David is pursued by the police, he must have done something wrong, so why a protection team again? I guess you have to pick one. If a protection team then state why he needs protection. Also is he owing Tony Bill? if yes, then Tony should rather beRead more

    Sounds like fun, but i’m a little confused here. If David is pursued by the police, he must have done something wrong, so why a protection team again? I guess you have to pick one. If a protection team then state why he needs protection. Also is he owing Tony Bill? if yes, then Tony should rather be looking for him and not the other way round. I think you just need a rearrangement of your idea for it to come out in good shape.

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  3. Posted: January 5, 2013In:

    After wrongly being convicted of a crime, three hundred years in the future, a former elite soldier is sent to an experimental prison camp on a distant moon, only to be drawn into a violent conflict between an ancient civilization and his fellow prisoners.

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    I like this concept, only you have to find a way to trim it up

    I like this concept, only you have to find a way to trim it up

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