1. Posted: May 23, 2012In: ,

    Accidentally trapped in a painting by the use of future technology, four disparate teens must band together to decode mysteries and outwit thieves to find the path home.

    uDawnWrite

    I love this logline. Without you stating, you can most definitely tell it's an adventure. I can picture this on the Big Screen, and doing good at that.

    I love this logline. Without you stating, you can most definitely tell it’s an adventure. I can picture this on the Big Screen, and doing good at that.

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  2. Posted: April 26, 2012In:

    When an idealistic new Prison Psychiatrist is threatened by the resident Crime Lord, her only hope is an aging Hit Man kept in solitary confinement so long he has lost his mind.

    uDawnWrite

    Great logline, but I do have a petty suggestion. How about adding a comma (,) after long, it threw me just a little.

    Great logline, but I do have a petty suggestion. How about adding a comma (,) after long, it threw me just a little.

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  3. Posted: April 26, 2012In:

    21 Years and 3 murders later the nightmare ends, and the story of a battered young man can be told.

    uDawnWrite

    I think you should give a little more detail about the nightmare, as well as the battered young man. I'm no expert, but this logline leave little to the imagination. Is the murders dealing with revenge, or maybe something that took place when he was a teenager. Check out this link: https://loglines.Read more

    I think you should give a little more detail about the nightmare, as well as the battered young man. I’m no expert, but this logline leave little to the imagination. Is the murders dealing with revenge, or maybe something that took place when he was a teenager.

    Check out this link: https://loglines.org/howto/. It helped me a lot with writing my loglines. 🙂

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