1. Posted: March 21, 2019In:

    When a city council decides to impound all stray animals, a selfish ex-house cat seeks refuge with a family of street cats, but to earn his place, he must learn to put others first and outsmart the Feline Mafia henchman that stands between the street cats and the new home that will save them all.

    Wayne Logliner

    Sounds like an interesting concept - and an interesting main character - typical of a cat to be selfish! The name "street cats" is a little confusing.? If they are street cats, why do they live in a home? To shorten it, maybe delete the last bit,. Not sure if it's needed: "that stands between the stRead more

    Sounds like an interesting concept – and an interesting main character – typical of a cat to be selfish!
    The name “street cats” is a little confusing.? If they are street cats, why do they live in a home?
    To shorten it, maybe delete the last bit,. Not sure if it’s needed: “that stands between the street cats and the new home that will save them all.”

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  2. Posted: July 2, 2016In:

    A racially prejudices cricket fan about to lose the family hotel goes back in time with his prospective Indian son in law and must overcome his prejudices if he is to get back to his own time and save the pub.

    Wayne Logliner

    "Racially prejudiced"? is the same as "racist", so you could cut out one word there.? And If he's racist, I can't imagine he'd have many viewers on his side.? Maybe his flaw could be about cricket prejudice or hotel prejudice, or pride or stubbornness. Because he is a cricket fan, I'm guessing he isRead more

    “Racially prejudiced”? is the same as “racist”, so you could cut out one word there.? And If he’s racist, I can’t imagine he’d have many viewers on his side.? Maybe his flaw could be about cricket prejudice or hotel prejudice, or pride or stubbornness.

    Because he is a cricket fan, I’m guessing he is going back in time to a cricket match? If not, why mention that he is a cricket fan?? If he is,? would be good to see that mentioned.? ?? Otherwise, I don’t understand why he is going back in time.

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  3. Posted: June 23, 2016In:

    Selfish athlete learns the importance of humility when he falls for a single mom while rehabbing an injury as his team makes playoff push.

    Wayne Logliner

    What's the single mom's trait that teaches him humility.? That seems missing in the logline. Also what's a playoff?? Just kidding.? But if you are marketing to chick flick fans or Aussies like me who don't do playoffs, it's a bit alienating? :)

    What’s the single mom’s trait that teaches him humility.? That seems missing in the logline.

    Also what’s a playoff?? Just kidding.? But if you are marketing to chick flick fans or Aussies like me who don’t do playoffs, it’s a bit alienating? 🙂

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