When James finds himself infatuated with his coworker Cindy, he is torn by the sinister advice of the sentient food in his fridge and the feelings of love felt in his timid heart.

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griffynbachta · Penpusher · 84 pts

It’s an interesting premise, sets up a romantic story with a twist. The main thing I’d like to see in this Logline is James’s action that he takes in response to his infatuation and hearing sinister advice from sentient food. That will be the bulk of the movie, so including that in the Logline would give us a great idea of what this story is.

I’d also recommend clarifying the inciting incident for the story. What kicks everything off? Because finding yourself infatuated with someone is a great character trait, but it isn’t a visual event that will prompt the character to go on an adventure. From what I can see it may be discovering the sentient food? Or something sinister the food does? I’m not sure, but it’s something that if clarified, would strengthen the logline