by Knightrider · Maestro · 3,370 pts
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This sounds a lot like Minority Report meets A Beautiful Mind. With this concept i'm sure the story could quickly become very convoluted so make sure that doesn't come across in the logline. Make it simple, short and concise. try something like:
A lonely mathematician obsessed with causality creates a future simulation program only for it to predict he will die in three days unless he kills a stranger who he begins to fall for. (33 words) - This could be even tighter. Rule of thumb is if it can't be done in 20-25 words it can't be done in a screenplay.
Otherwise, very interesting concept and good job!
This sounds a lot like Minority Report meets A Beautiful Mind. With this concept i'm sure the story could quickly become very convoluted so make sure that doesn't come across in the logline. Make it simple, short and concise. try something like:
A lonely mathematician obsessed with causality creates a future simulation program only for it to predict he will die in three days unless he kills a stranger who he begins to fall for. (33 words) - This could be even tighter. Rule of thumb is if it can't be done in 20-25 words it can't be done in a screenplay.
Otherwise, very interesting concept and good job!
"Funnily enough, I have toyed with the idea that this is a device or application that was widely accessible. I thought it would be interesting if we could see the implications to our choices before we make them. How that technology might be abused, used or even restricted or controlled by certain members of society in order to have an advantage over another."
That, right there sounds like an excellent idea for a sequel. Maybe in this story it's right after the family creates the app, and then it is either stolen or someone else in the family releases it to the public for the sequel. Either way, with the proper conflict this could be a great story.
