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Jack, did you see THE DINNER PARTY or something else? This logline above is for a new script, still in development with Screen Australia funding. We never received funding for TDP because the project officers were nervous about litigation at the time (2008).
This isn't a logline and I had to read it and re-read it a few times to understand exactly what story, and whose, is being told. It does seem an interesting story but it loses punch and impact from the details. As a story, it seems quite dark and I'm guessing the main character would be Anu - watching an unempathetic character for 2 hours being macabre and bizarre and then kill someone wouldn't be an enjoyable experience.
There also isn't a clear goal in Anu's story. I could imagine the story being very dark and thought-provoking, until the murder. It would not be interesting to follow somebody go mad. Also, the problem with watching a character go mad on screen is that you can't trust them and as a viewer you can't trust what you're watching which stops you caring about the story.
Point of view would be a problem and Patrockable gives a good suggestion about creating another character, it would certainly need a character for the audience to follow and empathise and distance the disintegrating mental state from the viewer enough.
Thematically it sounds interesting though.
Dave (judge)
Your subject matter is intriguing. It could be a good psychological thriller. Her passive friends remind me of the Bystander effect, where a person in a group is less likely to help someone in danger because the responsibility is shared.
However, I agree with the others: there is no active protagonist who we empathise with. Perhaps create a fictional character who tries to stop her?
