A teenage girl saves the life of an old woman, who in return, grants the girl one wish — to be anyone but herself.

That's a great rewrite! Thanks!

That's a great rewrite! Thanks!

Interesting inciting incident. My advice is: she needs an obtainable goal. What has she always wanted that she now has a chance of getting because of this wish? Be prom queen? Make a million dollars? Kill the man who murdered her parents? Get the boy?

The goal will give us a hint as to who she'll choose to be and what kind of movie we can expect, sparking further interest.

Also, give her a strength and weakness so we are promised an inner journey. This also helps us understand why she wants what she wants.

Here's an example:

"A shy teenage outcast finally has a chance to be prom queen when an old woman grants her one wish ? to be anyone but herself."