To forgive the woman who triggered his father?s suicide, a man must risk everything to return his lucky pendant to its origin in the Brazilian jungle
RussellNSamurai
To forgive the woman who triggered his father?s suicide, a man must risk everything to return his lucky pendant to its origin in the Brazilian jungle
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I’m struggling with the logline for this, because the protagonist doesn’t have a specific goal – it’s a “journey of recovery” story.
Act I: Alex is wealthy, wary of relationships, and his only family is his Father.
Inciting incident: Family fortune is stolen, Father is declared bankrupt and suicides.
Act IIa: ?Alex becomes successful, suffers serious injury, discovers his great-grandfather’s lucky pendant points SE and decides to track it to “relax and heal” ?He meets and falls for a girl.
MRP: The girl is the daughter of the accountant who stole the family fortune. ?Alex initiates legal proceedings against the Accountant.
Act IIb: Alex resumes his search, is betrayed by his guide, captured by a Cartel gang, and struggles alone in the Brazilian jungle.
Act III: He finds a Mesoamerican funerary chamber and returns the pendant to its place.
Act IV: He learns?about his father, has a catharsis and wins back the girl.
Any suggestions on how to logline it greatly welcome.
Gone are the days of saying “must risk everything” and having that be good enough. As the regulars on here will tell you, we need to know more. Right off the bat, it looks like Act iib occurs too late in the story, and should probably be the Incit Inc and the girl is the Antagonist that you need to mention in the log. Hmmm, but how?
If it’s not revealed to either the audience or the main character that the girl is the culprit responsible for stealing the fortune until the mid point of Act 2, then how can it qualify to be cited as the inciting incident in the logline. The inciting incident is the event and/or reveal by the mid point of the 1st Act.
How about making the protagonist the character who attempts suicide but survives because — or he stops at the last moment? ?And then he decides to take his journey for the objective goal of…
Well, that’s still a problem. ?Learning how to forgive is a subjective need — not a objective want. ?The struggle for an objective goal is the therapeutic process by which a character?resolves his subjective problem, yes, but in drama that resolution is unintentional.
The logline is about what the character knows and pursues consciously and intentionally, not what he pursues unconsciously and resolves unintentionally.
“The logline is about what the character knows and pursues consciously and intentionally, not what he pursues unconsciously and resolves unintentionally.”
Very true. KISS method helps with this.