Penpusher
Posted: 2013-08-27T13:35:22+10:00 In:

After a Great War the world divides and is ruled by different beliefs, in order to maintain peace. An Empress finds the cure to fatal diseases and refuses to share it, unless they join the sustainable lifestyle she leads.

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    1. Samurai

      Is the Empress your protagonist, or antagonist? if she is your protagonist, I don’t understand what her goal is – besides withholding vital medical knowledge from people who need it. If that is the case, then you’ve got a serious problem with audience empathy with your character, I would imagine.

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    2. Penpusher

      Hi,

      Agree with the above. She sounds more like a wicked witch type character who wants to start a war – in which case who is going to bring her down/your protagonist?

      If alternatively she is intended to be the protagonist you might need to word it differently.

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    3. Penpusher

      Hey, thanks for answering!

      Yes, the Empress is the protagonist, yet I haven’t seen her as a wicked witch, which means I’ve been re-writing a lot. The story is meant to be a web-comic, so she still won’t be a sweet princess, but I’ll relax the villainess of her character.

      Thanks again!

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