Posted: 2013-09-20T00:08:55+10:00 In:

When a entire citys population disappears over night, it's up to the young soldier to find out where and why in order to find his sister again. / Amanda E

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    1. Is the goal to find his/her sister, and how long will this goal take to complete?
      Perhaps it could be “before another citys population disappears” 🙂
      best regards/ Matilda

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    2. Penpusher

      Hi,

      this is an interesting idea. I think your logline needs to reflect the goal of the soldier more.

      “When a soldier returns from war and discovers his home town has disappeared, he must uncover the truth in order to find his family before losing them forever”

      Suggested title “Lost City”

      good luck.

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    3. Penpusher

      I should note that the reason I changed it to ‘when he returns from war’ is because it explains how he himself wasn’t lost with the city. If the city disappeared over night – how is it he didn’t go with it?

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