After having her father killed, a farm girl must endure a journey with a tough US marshall to get her revenge.
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Good question.? A single adjective is preferable for the sake of brevity.? My 1st inclination was to describe her as merely stubborn. That is certainly her defining characteristic and in most situations stubbornness is a virtue.? Which would be good enough for the logline for the 1969 version.
Long answer:
But the 2010 Coen brothers version has a mixed out come for the protagonist, Mattie Ross, and so I am inclined to think the logline should suggest a character flaw that leads to that mixed outcome.
I am true believer in? the ancient Greek concept of hubris, a? notion that infused and? determined the outcome of (most) Greek tragedies.? Simply stated, hubris is the dramatic "sin"? of excess, of a life , situation or value system that is out of balance.? (In contrast to the Greek ideal of?sophrosyn?,? moderation, restraint.)? The Greeks believed that any virtue carried too far becomes a vice.? It becomes the problem, not the solution.
So in that regard, I would say that Mattie suffers from the an hubris of inflexible stubbornness.? Initially, it's a virtue in enlisting the services of the U.S. Marshal.? ?But, she doesn't know when to let up, to let go, to adapt her plan? to the goals of her rival, the Texas Ranger.? She wants the murderer brought to justice her way. Period.? And, so her virtue becomes a vice, a problem that leads to the mixed denouement.
As I watched that ending to the 2nd movie, I imagined the great Greek tragedian, Sophocles (who wrote Oedipus Rex), nodding his head and?whispering (in ancient Greek), "Yeah, the Coen brothers got it right. That's true dramatic justice."
But Hollywood movie makers aren't big on that kind of dramatic justice.? But if you're the Coen brothers, you can get away with that kind of denouement.
Short answer:
Stubborn is good enough.? But then how to describe the Marshal?? He's a mixed-bag character.? What makes him such an interesting character is not that he's tough (his defining characteristic), but that he's also a drunk.? So if I have the luxury to describe him as "tough, drunken" why not elaborate with one more word for her?
So I did.
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Foxtrot25:
Your take does flow better and is leaner at 18 words.? Although I'm? inclined to include an adjective to define the girl.? Maybe tenacious.? To signal that she's the protagonist -- not the Marshal she hires.? She doesn't remain down on the farm, plowing fields, herding the cattle while the Marshal undertakes all the jeopardy of venturing into dangerous territory.
Perhaps your version is good enough for a film with a story already has a? pre-sold story line in the form of a best-selling book.? But is it good enough for a script developed ex nihilo by an unknown, unproven, unconnected writer?? That's the question on my mind every time I evaluate loglines for scripts already made into movies.
Foxtrot25:
Your take does flow better and is leaner at 18 words.? Although I'm? inclined to include an adjective to define the girl.? Maybe tenacious.? To signal that she's the protagonist -- not the Marshal she hires.? She doesn't remain down on the farm, plowing fields, herding the cattle while the Marshal undertakes all the jeopardy of venturing into dangerous territory.
Perhaps your version is good enough for a film with a story already has a? pre-sold story line in the form of a best-selling book.? But is it good enough for a script developed ex nihilo by an unknown, unproven, unconnected writer?? That's the question on my mind every time I evaluate loglines for scripts already made into movies.