Mentor
Posted: 2015-06-30T09:55:29+10:00 In:

With only 24 hours before her life support machine is switched off, a coma patient is given a second chance when she is recruited by an organisation that operates within the human subconscious to help stop a terror group that controls people via their dreams.

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    1. Penpusher

      “A bitter coma patient”? How can he express emotions when he’s in a coma? “A unique undercover agency”? I think it’s back to the dictionary for you!

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    2. Singularity

      The logline is too long as it uses descriptions too convoluted to be effective whilst keeping the inciting incident and goal vague and plot unclear.

      Bare bones:
      After a coma patient is recruited in her own mind by an agency that operates in the human psyche she must fight a russian coma patient to prevent a soviet mind control program.

      Interesting theme as it deals with a scary question does the mind stay active in a coma?

      But all I can think of is Inception?

      How will this differ in practical terms?

      Hope this helps.

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    3. Mentor

      It helps a great deal.

      Inception, was a heist movie, albeit a unique and reverse take on the idea – where you are implanting rather than stealing – whereas I want to differ from that aspect as mine will be more like a chase / suspense thriller (Very Cat and Mouse) – plus I do want to play with that element of is he or isn’t he alive, is this all just a fantasy in their head, or is this a representation of their fight for survival?

      I guess, I would have the same problem as Ghost in the Shell, which I believe is being made into a live action movie… they will need to differ from the Matrix, which will be difficult as a lot of the Matrix was inspired by the movie, but not impossible and with a different them and take on an established genre I am hoping both will have a place and can be enjoyed individually.

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    4. Singularity

      If the soviet mind control program was actually any good, wouldn’t the Soviet Union still exist?

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    5. Mentor

      Well, I would have explained this – granted I am still early doors research wise – however, it would have been something along the lines of either

      a) The limitations of the technology back then meant only one person at a time could be hacked, and their were numerous methods that could block the signal etc and various scientists within the programme were taken out or died.

      b) The US lead a strike on the base that contained the device, and destroyed it without knowing – or perhaps some did – and a back up machine has been either built and / or discovered.

      c) The device itself started to act on it’s own, and thus was shut down and couldn’t be controlled.

      Long story short, once I have continued the research I will have a feasible reason for your question.

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    6. Singularity

      The boogeyman of soviet science and ideology died in 1991; it seems to me it’s way past time to upgrade to a sci-fi premise relevant and credible in the 21st century.

      Also, we know so much more about neurophysiology and cognitive science than we did in 1991 that I suggest the notion of “mind control” is a harder sell, even as a sci-fi concept. Mind manipulation, yes, but that’s a different mind game than “mind control”.

      And I would point out that the objective goal in “Inception” was not mind control; the goal was not to turn any one into human automaton in terms of modifying, let alone controlling, everything a human would think and do. The objective goal was to plant ONE specific idea to effect ONE specific decision.

      What ONE specific objective goal is at stake in the “mind control” via people’s dreams premised in this logline?

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