Penpusher
Posted: 2018-07-20T02:42:55+10:00 In:

After a suicidal client in a rough part of town steals euthanasia drugs, a house-call vet must keep him talking until the police arrive.

After a suicidal client in a rough part of town steals euthanasia drugs, a house-call vet must keep him talking until the police arrive.
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    3 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      Is this for a short?? Doesn’t seem to be substantial enough for a feature film,

      And the dramatic situation is unclear.? It doesn’t say the suicidal person took the drugs — only that he stole them.? So what has incited the crisis? What has created the crisis such that the protagonist must keep him talking?

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    2. Samurai

      Agreed with dpg. It’s hard to provide feedback because the dramatic situation isn’t clear.

      Does the Vet want to help the thief, or send them to prison?

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    3. Singularity

      Is the fact that he’s in a rough part of town relevant? If so, clarify. If not, remove. When you say ‘client’ do you mean the vet’s client? There’s a pet somewhere then. Surely the police would be there in a few minutes so, as dpg said, there doesn’t seem to be enough for a feature. You need to make us care for both the client and the vet so that we care whether the guy kills himself. Currently, there’s nothing to suggest why we should.

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