Dr Rob Morath, a depressed psychiatrist, turns his life around by destroying the lives of his patients.

You don’t need to include character names in the logline – it takes up valuable word count and adds nothing.

What’s the incident that kick starts this story? What happens that upsets the balance in his life and will spend the movie trying to correct it?

The character, in a bid to make his life better, ruins the lives of other people? Regardless of the ethical dilemma why is the audience going to empathise with a guy like this? They need to want the character to succeed in his quest and I just can’t see that happening here.

His goal is to turn his life around – can you give us something visual and tangible for this. What does something “turning his life around” look like on screen? Film is a visual medium and a logline reader should be able to picture the film in their mind. Find an event that visually represents his life being turned around.

All that being said, I feel like there’s something in this idea. It’s a dark comedy for sure and I can certainly see where the humour could come from. I just think it’s really important to set it up correctly so the audience could empathise with him. The inciting incident needs to be something that makes the journey to the goal understandable. We have to feel like it’s ok for him to ruin his patients’ lives – that’s the only way an audience would get behind me. Easiest way to do this is to make them morally, ethically and socially more despicable than him. His actions are then teaching them a lesson as much as helping him turn his life around… like a comedy version of Saw. I’d watch that!

Hope this helps.