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on Called to a disturbance a cop discovers a murder and everything points to his daughter. He calls upon favours, legal and illegal to hide the truth

Thanks. The story is more about him desperately trying to save his daughter. He has no consideration for his police career or oath. She is a drug addict and this is the body of her dealer boyfriend. He threw her…
on A woman tries to engage with her dysfunctional biological family after she learns that her late loving and caring mother abducted her as a baby.

Here is the story, so far. A woman is raised by a single mum that had a really great job. Paid for a private school, a really nice middle class life. The woman has never felt anything but loved. She…
on A woman tries to engage with her dysfunctional biological family after she learns that her late loving and caring mother abducted her as a baby.

With the revelation that her late mother abducted her, a woman struggles to connect with her dysfunctional biological family hoping to get assistance with her medical issues.
on Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

sorry for the autocorrect issues. Unsure should be unseen.
on Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

Here is the short pitch. Each morning he has breakfast with his wife’s ghost (he knows it is a grief hallucination). He meets a woman and that is in the early stages of a romance. The cops come and tell…
on Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

So true. Thanks.
on When fantasy characters invade the big city’s system, a frustrated dreamer must deal his imaginary robot girlfriend came to life, but when she remembers being someone who was kidnapped years ago by the head of organized crime, they must team up to unravel the mysteries of the other characters past lifes by using brute force and a two-faced mask to cover their insecurities.

We have all heard the expression “Less is more” well the reverse is also true “More is Less”. The more you pile on the less visible the story becomes. What I am seeing is a huge amount of plot. But…
on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

Your story can (and should) have heaps of twists and turns. But a logline should give a clear pitch of the story. People assume Logline X 100 complex things equals movie. So logline confused by too much X 100 equal…
on Maximus comes back to life as his body is ignited on the funeral pyre, sparking an escape and betrayal rife with visions of heaven and hell which condemn him back to the coliseum.

What is his aim. What are the goals of the story. What may stop him? Just a general observation. A lot of your loglines are pretty but lack any story. Don’t believe the idea that a logline has to be…
on A woman finds a phone connected to the future, she is tasked by people to do a series of increasingly extreme tasks in an attempt to fix their present, or it may be her latest bout of mental illness.

Yeah. I think it is a “bridge to far” moment. It is like when you see a logline, “a man desperate to reunite with his estranged daughter after he find he has cancer, while saving the world from aliens” (Aliens…