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on A troubled male escort arrives at the plush apartment of a large media company CEO for the afternoon, but when her past secrets are revealed neither of them will be the same afterward

*LESS detail about the room and setting, and MORE about the characters and the events.
on A troubled male escort arrives at the plush apartment of a large media company CEO for the afternoon, but when her past secrets are revealed neither of them will be the same afterward

A logline isn't meant to be a 'teaser' of the movie. It should be a succinct but complete overview of the movie. Therefore I think we need more and less detail in there. Less detail about the room and the…
on A woman, who can predict whether couples are in love, wants her old life back after well-intentioned friends turn her into an internet sensation, and she loses her magic touch and is outed as a fraud.

Perhaps more detail? Odie, your proposed version has removed critical details. From your amendment, we must now ask: Is the protagonist's problem with one of hubris/humility? is she an attention seeker who forced herself into the limelight and is now…
on LEGION OF ONE – When a rogue AI threatens to exterminate the world’s population, a gutsy cyber agent streams into the mind of a psychotic hacker to retrieve the shutdown code. Does this logline sound like a winner?

This sounds similar in premise and structure to the J-Lo movie "The Cell". I can't find the official logline for it, but perhaps see if you can track it down for reference. Here's the IMDB Synopsis: An F.B.I. Agent persuades…
on A romancing recluse yachtsman and cameo actress discover one another career tramps team up to fleece the jet set but recluses ex returns to rekindle love with revenge as a IRS sting – SuperTramps

1. What does 'romancing' mean in this context? 2. What does 'discover one another' mean in this context? - more detail needed. 3. I think some punctuation and grammatical correction may be needed here to clarify your meaning and intentions.…