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on While escaping a terrorist attack , two biggest female business rivals discover that they are homosexual . For the world they can’t stay together and for them they can’t live apart.

?While escaping a terrorist attack , two biggest female business rivals discover that they are homosexual . For the world they can't stay together and for them they can't live apart.? I think you have a story here just not…
on A rapidly spreading sickness causes a suicidal teenager to put aside her intentions to save her loved ones.

REV: On the verge of?suicide, an insecure teen?is?expected to care for her alcoholic father during a quarentine but when?her father is forced to spend time in close quarters with her polyamorous lovers she must keep the peace to keep them…
on Confined to her apt complex during a CDC quarentine Briona must find a way for her father and her lovers not to kill each other.

REV; The worst flu outbreak in years is spreading like wildfire, prompting citizens all over the world to be quarentined, and leaving a young girl to keep the peace between her father and her polyamorous lovers inside their apt complex…
on Vowlence- In the year 2050, matrimony’s perfect success rate is challenged when a “created” spouse falls for someone other than her creator and falls in love with having a choice.

While a clearly defined goal is appreciated, it seems you're on your way to a very interesting story already. This LogLine has irony and cost, but fails to define a specific audience. If I knew who this was being marketed…