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When they discover a plot by do-gooding aliens to destroy human sexuality (in the mistakenly belief that it causes war on Earth), Nerdy Sid and Zen must save the world’s libido.
The part in parentheses throws me off. Grammar aside, I wonder how the aliens won't see the terrible long-term effect of their plan. Could they just be looking for a non-violent way to eradicate the human race over time? Just…
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When the king of the elves decides it’s time to BECOME, it’s up to a haughty Elvin princess to leave the Green Sea and enter the world of the Human “Barbarians” to find her brother, so he can take the throne.
Gotcha. Well, maybe you don't need it in the logline. Focus on the daughter needing to find the heir to the throne. What will happen if she fails? Is someone else trying to take it?
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When the king of the elves decides it’s time to BECOME, it’s up to a haughty Elvin princess to leave the Green Sea and enter the world of the Human “Barbarians” to find her brother, so he can take the throne.
You lost me at "BECOME." What does that mean?
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In a bankrupt city, with jobs on the line, old George and Phil must compete to be the fastest garbage men they’ve ever been. The young new guys are fast, but are they smart?
The only one that comes to mind, Geno, is 1990's Men At Work. This is more like Grumpy Old Men At Work, haha. But seriously, I think the setting and characters definitely hint at fun, but as far as story…
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Two college students venture to a forgotten place to find the truth about it’s past. The horror they find there is as old as time, and just as hungry.
What separates your story from The Ruins? Try to include that unique element. Also, hungry as time?
