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A true-blue beat cop volunteers as Internal Affair’s snitch to root out an anonymous traitor when seized drugs surface in his cloistered community.
Just reorganize this one a little. When drugs surface in his cloistered community, ?a?true-blue beat cop volunteers as Internal Affair's snitch to root out?the?traitor. Maybe there's another way to say 'seized drugs'...
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2069AD. When her step-mother throws out the stray cat she’s been harbouring, a lonely girl in a sterile biosphere, must brave an unknown, toxic outside world to find her only friend.
I don't agree with moses99 at all. Your suggested logline is pretty dang good. (Maybe remove the comma in front of the word 'must'.) A couple of questions:? is the date really?necessary, and is there a better word?to replace?"find" that…
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Late afternoon August 18, 1966 South Vietnam – for three and a half hours, in the pouring rain, amid the mud and shattered trees of a rubber plantation called Long Tan, Major Harry Smith and his dispersed company of 108 young and mostly inexperienced Australian and New Zealand soldiers are fighting for their lives, holding off an overwhelming enemy force of 2,500 battle hardened Viet Cong and North Vietnamese soldiers.
Try something along the line of : When an overwhelming force of Veit Cong soldiers attack their position, an untried Major must motivate his inexperienced soldiers to turn the tide of the battle.
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A timid, admin clerk reluctantly chooses to be the only stable friend of an erratic, homeless woman she had idolised back when they were School Captain.
Untying the knot and fitting this into the suggested logline?template, you'd come up with something like : When an erratic, homeless woman?turns out to be the old School Captain she idolised,?a timid, admin clerk must become the tower of strength…
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A struggling rock band must fight through petty rivalries, a dickhead manager and the zombie apocalypse, saving their band and the world on their way to the top.
The other reviewers are correct. The core idea seems to be "When the Zombie Apocalypse destroys their world, an aging rock band must find their own unique sound to save the world." or something similar.
