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A young female assassin becomes the target when her ex-SAS uncle comes looking for revenge for the murder of his brother, her abusive father.
Thanks Karel, great feedback that will be put to good use. Revision coming soon.
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An idealistic priest is hunted by Church agents after he uncovers a plot to release a virus that targets non believers.
Thanks to both of you for the feedback, I'll be back with a revision soon.
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An idealistic priest is hunted by Church agents after he uncovers a plot to release a virus that targets non believers.
Originally it was intended as a discussion between religion and morality, the latter being being built on the former, but one being bent to an organisation's vision and the other interpreted on a personal level. If a devout priest discovered…
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An idealistic priest is hunted by Church agents after he uncovers a plot to release a virus that targets non believers.
The anti-virus is administered via Communion. Some people would naturally be immune and, if not devout, be hunted down and killed to allow no accidental access to a serum.
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An insecure process server, becomes the target of a serial killer, and teams u with a private investigator to catch the killer and regain his self confidence.
Neat one liner but contains too many elements. Serial killer's target, private investigator, catch the killer, regain self confidence. Which one is the important one? In which order do they go? Two goals- catch the killer and regain self confidence,…
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A frazzled man’s secret lives are set to collide when he discovers his wife has invited everyone he knows to his surprise 40th birthday.
First off, I take issue with Screenwriters Anonymous suggesting 40 is over the hill! ;-) On a more serious note, I see a conundrum here. If he has secret lives then presumably his wife wouldn't know the people involved or,…
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There is a company that can reset your life. If you don’t feel like you have succeed in life you can just reset your life.
To me it sounds like a public version of The Adjustment Bureau. That's not to say it wouldn't work but, as has been said before, the logline isn't giving us much beyond the idea. "On deciding to reset his life,…
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After being accused of murder, a naive woman must overcome fear and flee her sheltered world in search of the truth, only to discover she may be the worlds greatest assassin.
Intriguing stuff. I'm not sure the overcoming fear bit is actually necessary though, it's a bit vague to me. Why not call her a 'fearful' woman and cover her naiivit? with that as well? Just from this one liner though,…
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A drug dependent father finds himself part of an epic battle against a demonic legion and is joined in the fight by a time traveler from the future as he learns the fate of the world lies within the mind of his autistic child.
Sounds like an epic battle indeed, but there seem to be too many elements and as such I can't decide which is the most important. How about missing out the bit about a time traveller, interesting as it is, to…
