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on A reluctant psychic’s near death experience reveals that soul families are trapped in karmic loops and unless she finds the strength to confront her narcissistic mother by using her psychic abilities to find their past life mistakes they will remain trapped reliving the same life and death experiences for eternity. 0 Reply Share

Good concept and your logline hits the necessary beats, but imo the sentence is just a little bit hard to read. I would consider rewording and/or cleaning up everything after "unless she finds the strength" I also think wording like…
on After being accidentally injected with an experimental hyper adrenaline drug, a skinny, shy and dull-life man must learn how to use his newly ultra-energized body to escape from a secret government organization which is on the hunt for him.

Excellent! A nitpick/suggestion, I'd consider using "lifeless" over "dull-life" which sounds a little awkward imo