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Suffering heart damage after a weapons sale is ambushed by terrorsists, a military industrialist/ playboy builds a hi-tech armoured suit to save his own life and protect his company from the people he trusts.
Hmm, yes I assumed that "playboy" would indicate his selfishness as his character flaw but it could be clearer. I keep reading conflicting loglines that often suggest being open ended is good but if clarity is key then I should…
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A now broken doctor is sentenced to death for his wifes murder, forced to reassess his morals, he escapes now as the clock ticks he must survive to prove his innocence.
That's good man. Short and sweet, nice and clear, easy to read like it should be. I think you're supposed to switch around where you've entered the logline and title though ;)
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A film director, mentally driven to the edge, fires his ego-maniacal narrator, a pixy, who later manipulates his movie for her own personal gain. — or so it would seem.
I really like this. I was captivated by the concept, the twist and the archetypal characters. I got a bit confused when I got to the "or so it would seem" but without that it's a very strange but interesting…
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When a small club owner finds out his wife is cheating with one of his young bartenders, he hires a conniving hitman and we discover that in Texas, nothing is simple…
Thanks gman, interesting points! I'm not sure about the club, I kind of feel it establishes a connection to the bartender which is nice. I really see what you mean about the punchline missing a joke, I tried to avoid…
