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A smart, new classy version of an old west historical tale that has never been told, between a well-dressed clean man of small stature and his dirty giant brutal enemy with a personal vendetta; all of which takes place in a large alluring and immaculately clean gambling hall and infamous brothel, where heaven and hell plays out.
It's a lot of description, but I don't know what they story is about. What brings them together? What is the personal vendetta. And does it only take place in these two places? The gambling hall and the brothel?
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Born with all her memories from previous lives, Juliet Jones risks everything to convince her past-life soul mate in this lifetime that they are meant to be together.
Thanks Heather. Yes it is the same soul mate she remembers from all her lives, identifying mark by a unique birthmark. Of course, he doesn't remember her. He has a "girlfriend" and is a playboy who doesn't believe in love.…
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Two corrupt ex-cops travel to Coober Pedy with a bag of cash and play chicken with vengeful bikies, thieves, a yakuza wannabe, sociopathic rednecks and a rather short-tempered, one-armed deaf guy.
Why? What brings them there. You have enough characters there.. but I am trying to figure out if this is a comedy? Action? I don't know what is at stake.
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When an aquaphobic janitor discovers he has the ability
to control water, he must overcome his fear to save his
fiance from a fire manipulating madman
It's not bad. I can see the conflict and the fear. I guess the first thing to pop into my head was why a janitor? aquaphobic is that a fear of all water? I am assuming janitors use water to…
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“What if a group of hard as nails criminals had to become women to rob the bookies at Royal Ascot’s Ladies Day event?”
I agree... starting a logline with what if, seems to general, like who are you asking?
