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A conflicted irreplaceable right hand man to a mob boss, finds his warnings disregarded in a tug of war between two warring bosses for his allegiance. ? ??
Sorry Grammer teacher but your sentence - 'dude, I think you're out with your commas. You defo don't need one after boss' - doesn't make any sense. Sorry but 'Millers Crossing' is actually a real film, the Logline is in…
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As a cursed detective struggles to contain the wolf within, he suspects he is being framed for murder. With the true killer desperate to expose the existence of werewolves, the detective must accept the beast within… or be lost to the wolf forever.
This probably isn't a Logline, even though the story sounds super cool. A Logline tells the basic story in 27 words or less, and is designed to market an idea before a lift goes from one floor to another. (…
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An obsessed vigilante has to face the errors of his past when the son of one of his victims infiltrates his gang…
It needs a coma in there, as well it would be good if we had an extra word to explain the character, such as - An obsessed, (guilt ridden or single minded) vigilante confronts his sinfull past- blah blah And…
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A child psychologist wants to help Cole, a young boy who reminds him of a boy he once failed, looking into Cole’s life Cole looks into his. Cole’s secret, “I see dead people.”
I think it is a great attempt, but there is a lot 'Cole' in there. But again you did well.
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A penniless writer who falls in love with a courtesan must defeat his jealousy and an evil Duke in order to rescue his lover from her underworld.
It would have been nice if we got a time and location of the story. The movie is set in the city of Paris in about 1899, unfortunatly above could be from the middle ages to the Joss Whedon's 'fire…
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A fireman is haunted by the flaming ghost of a man he failed to save from a burning building as it starts burning the survivors to death.
Nice. It's short and to the point. The only thing I would change is a comma after building for grammar impact and ' as he starts to incinerate the survivors to ash'. But that is just my spin on it…
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Dr. Caitlin Steele is a relationship phobic, yet successful NYC sex therapist who is hired as a consultant to treat a League One London football club in the wake of recent scandals. Sparks fly when she meets team captain and womanizer, Ray Brunner, intent on bringing his club to a long awaited championship before his retirement and who wants nothing to do with an American therapist on his turf.
I think it's okay, having the first name there is a good start. IMBD has the doctor's name from the fugitive in their log line and it works well. In the end I think you do what the log line…
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When a soldier on leave from the Android Wars finds that his family and neighbourhood near Washington DC are missing, he must track down the hapless alien scientist responsible for the mishap.
It sounds like an exciting story, but the log line is too busy and a bit all over the place.
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Two rival gangsters team up to track down a cop, while one wants him dead, the other wants him alive.
I think it starts off very well and I wouldn't change the first part, but it does need more info to sweeten the pot and give us more insight on the story itself. But all in all it's a start.
