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A brash missionary and a local gang must set aside their feud and defend their village against a violent drug cartel.
Thanks Steven... that's an interesting direction you've taken - one I haven't considered. I'd always understood loglines to be a kind of a practical description of the story ("cut the bull son, and just tell me what it's about"), but…
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With an entire school held captive, a doctor must relive a traumatic childhood that may solve the mystery behind the sadistic madman that threatens his daughter’s life.
I like the general concept, but I'd agree with the others here in that 'relive a traumatic childhood' feels vague, and slightly passive. It's difficult without knowing the entire story, but does this help? "When his daughter's entire school is…
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A brash missionary and a local gang must set aside their feud and defend their village against a violent drug cartel.
Hey Lucius - thanks for the comment. I hadn't considered adding the source of the conflict before, so that's an interesting note. How about something along these lines: "When a brash missionary and his young family reopen a long abandoned…
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A hardened hitman is haunted by the ghost of one of his targets, an undercover cop, who compels him to hunt down the men who doubled-crossed them both and kidnapped the deceased cop’s estranged daughter.
I quite like the idea here, but a lot depends on the tone - I'd hope it doesn't take itself too seriously, but this is quite a 'heavy' logline. I also think 'hunt down' and 'kidnapped' are covering the same…
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A scientist builds a satellite system that ends World War III; then must find a way to disable it to prevent another holocaust in the battle of Armageddon.
Hey Swede, My issue here is the disconnect between a system that shuts down wars, and the idea of Armageddon: I don't know if you mean the real Biblical Armageddon (which is implied by the phrase 'battle of'), or WW4…
