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on Will these teenagers’ unruly habits kill them? Or will it do enough damage to make them wish it did?

Your logline should ideally be about someone Who wants something by doing something else But something stands in their way. An unruly teen must learn to say no to his gangland friends before his way of life results in his…
on With the hope of regaining his former life, a prison councillor and functioning drug addict vows to help a psychologically damaged inmate deal with his past abuse as a subject in a 15 year drug trial.

Thanks for the input, plus you made me realise that I had a political councillor rather than a medical counsellor helping him. Cheers!
on When a cattle drover losses the bonus his family was counting on to survive, he turns to bounty hunting War Criminals in a Post-apocolyptic Australian Outback.

Cheers. Regarding bounties, I may be wrong, but if a dead or alive poster is put up then anyone who brings them in should get the bounty? I have in my mind that he will be trained up in the…
on When a cattle drover losses the bonus his family was counting on to survive, he turns to bounty hunting War Criminals in a Post-apocolyptic Australian Outback.

Thanks for the input. I envisage this to be a wild west type of world, but set in Australia, because of it's vastness. With out giving to much away, the story is set twenty or so years after a number…
on When a cattle drover losses the bonus his family was counting on to survive, he turns to bounty hunting War Criminals in a Post-apocolyptic Australian Outback.

How about when a teenage cattle drover loses both his father and the bonus that his starving family were counting on to survive, he joins forces with an ageing gun-slinger, competing for the last availible bounties from capturing war criminals…
on With the hope of regaining his former life, a prison councillor and functioning drug addict vows to help a psychologically damaged inmate deal with his past abuse as a subject in a 15 year drug trial.

This is an update, as I've just finished the script. Cheers.
on When the fantasy universe he wakes up in turns out to be an hallucination while he’s in a coma, a detached schoolboy must defeat the world’s evil king to regain consciousness; or pass on to the afterlife if he fails.

Sounds similar to the TV series "life on Mars" and "ashes to ashes".
on A teenage lumberjack wannabe struggles with his ironically hipster appearance as he figures out what it means to be a man.

If his name was jack and he was a dreamer you could call it Slumber Jack
on In the near future, the world is falling apart. A disillusioned highway cop turns vigilante when his young family are slaughtered by a motor cycle gang who refuses to recognise the law.

I like your adjustments, and you are right, except i'm not sure about the "futuristic motorcycle gang". To me that implies the gang rather than the film is set in the future.
on In the near future, the world is falling apart. A disillusioned highway cop turns vigilante when his young family are slaughtered by a motor cycle gang who refuses to recognise the law.

Well it made over $100 million at the box office, so you could say it probably did get read