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A college photography student who discovers terrifying images of ghostly children in her shots of an abandoned amusement park races to uncover a decades-old mystery to save her son from the vengeful spirits.
Thanks for the feedback, everyone! I've been taking it all in and breaking the story some more - here's a newer version: When a young mother whose photos capture terrifying images of the spirit world discovers ghostly intruders in her…
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A college photography student who discovers terrifying images of ghostly children in her shots of an abandoned amusement park races to uncover a decades-old mystery to save her son from the vengeful spirits.
This was the original: When a college photography student finds images of ghostly children in her photos of an abandoned amusement park, her investigation into a decades-old series of slayings puts her own life at risk. (I asked the admins…
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On the eve of World War Two, a reporter traveling aboard the Orient Express must expose a conspiracy, solve an impossible crime, outwit a spy, trap a killer, repel a Nazi attack, save the lives of all the passengers and persuade his beautiful traveling companion to like him just a little. He has forty-eight hours. No rush.
I realize you're trying to build to the punchline of your hero having to accomplish six impossible things before breakfast, but after the first three or four tasks my brain just shut down.
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Abandoned by his platoon, a patriotic soldier befriends a young Muslim girl and must choose between protecting her or helping his team eradicate her village.
I'm not seeing the big moral dilemma between saving a girl's life and slaughtering a village of innocent civilians. The harder the choices the protagonist faces, the better your story. This just seems like a no-brainer, no matter how patriotic…
