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An unimaginative accountant who hates musicals is transported to an alternate universe where everybody sing and dance. He struggles to return to his own universe before he succumbs to the compulsion of joining in.
Is there a way of succinctly describing how he is transported between universes and, more importantly, how "he struggles to return to his own universe?"
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After reuniting with and marrying his childhood friend, an aspiring writer tries to build a normal life in the wake of getting dragged into the murder of an arsonist that killed his wife’s father when they were kids, only to find that there is no “normal.”
Thanks for all the responses. I knew this wasn't perfect when I put it up. All of your comments make sense, but the bigger thing I'm taking from them is that, despite this being too wordy, it doesn't convey the…
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After reuniting with and marrying his childhood friend, an aspiring writer tries to build a normal life in the wake of getting dragged into the murder of an arsonist that killed his wife’s father when they were kids, only to find that there is no “normal.”
Thanks for the input. The inciting incident is the reuniting with the childhood friend. The murder of the arsonist happens around the end of the first act.
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To get the girl of his dreams a timid momma’s boy must team up with the local cat burglar, but her unorthodox methods put more than his love life at risk.
I agree. The how/why link between cat burglar and the boy's love is unclear. Also, how would a timid momma's boy know who the cat burglar is? If he did, wouldn't everyone else know? What I DO like is it…
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A brilliant Russian Cadet shortly after his graduation day is being targeted by the CIA, his respond was a personal travel to NYC to change all well-known war tactics with the help of his genius weapons.
I agree. Is Yuri the cadet? What is the cadet's obstacle?
