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Four friends with troubled pasts aquire stolen SWAT uniforms to raid drug houses. They are in over their heads with the local druglord when the cop who supplied the uniforms turns on them.
Some exciting elements hinted at there bu the logline is very unclear as to intentions and some other aspects. My first question is are they raiding drug houses to rob the dealers and profit themselves, or is it some kind…
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While appraising old and rare books at a restored colonial plantation, a book collector stumbles across a series of diaries that chronicle an alien visitation in 1781.
Very cool idea, but the others are right that it doesn't have the essential conflict yet. If this he has is this (what's in the logline) there are a whole lot of ways he could go with it. The next…
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Vibrant animals, big and small roamed over the grey world of Land, Sea and air, however time is running out.
Yep, this isn't a logline at all, sorry. Even if this were not going to be a human story and instead would be an abstract animal-story based thing, usually the animal characters would still be given human qualities of some…
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A special ops team made up of foreign soldiers as well as Americans do special ops missions across the world. until they are setup by their own government, forcing them to go into hiding.
Everything the others are saying here is on the money. If your story has a main character /protagonist, then your logline should be centered around him (or her). If it is a multi-protagonist type structure (think THE DIRTY DOZEN) rather…
