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on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

I think my big problem is that I need to restructure the story (luckily I haven't actually started writing it yet). That's something I've struggled with a lot. I tried a lot of different permutations, trying to decide where certain…
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

No, I get it. I think I'm struggling with the fact that (A) I don't want to give too much away in the logline and (B) I don't want it to be too on-the-nose. For the former, maybe you just…
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

Three new drafts, trying to feature the protagonist and objective goal while also hinting at the FULL story (not sure I've succeeded on the goal front; I've always struggled with that part): LIFE ON OTHER MOONS When the last woman…
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

Thanks, Tony! You're absolutely right.
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

Oh, no apologies necessary. It's helpful to know what's clear in the logline and what isn't. I'm still not sure which direction to take in revising it, but this is all going to end up helping. Thanks! I spent a…
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

He builds a relationship with the other main guy who is not going crazy. They're childhood friends and have always been in love but have never been able to say it or act on it. That's the B story, I…
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

There's a lot more to the plot, and I'm having a hard time getting it down to the bare essentials that would be required in a logline?without watering it down. There are elements of magical realism in the story, so…
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

Good point; that was hard to fit in there. His goal is to live?i.e., to get past the death of his mother (and all women) and figure out who he is now that the world has changed. Later, his goal…
on After the extinction of women and the destruction of the moon, an imaginative young man realizes that his sexuality is the one thing that may keep him alive.

FYI, this is based on a couple of stories from a short story collection I wrote (Life on Other Moons) to fulfill MFA requirements.