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A man with multiple personality disorder is being held captive by a murderous cult or his own personalities. He must rescue a girl who may or may not exist and escape.
Hi Craig! First of all, I LOVE your premise. That can be the hardest part of the writing process, so kudos for getting that out of the way. After reading your revised logline, the first thing that popped in my…
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A modest girl is pressured by her overbearing mother into partaking in a dangerous aging experiment that could benefit humanity and please her mother but ruin the girl’s life as she knows it. Now, the girl must learn to cope and escape this newfound nightmare.
I agree that this is an interesting situation. I can assume what the protagonist's goal is, but it is better for you to include it in your logline to avoid confusion. And I agree with the previous comment, what does…
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After years of watching from the wings, a determined young artist sets out to make her place on the world’s stage..
I agree with the others! Keep the word ?wallflower.? While I understand the idea of keeping some of the plot under-wraps to keep a sense of surprise, you still need to include the catalyst/inciting incident. Why now? Why do they…
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On the eve of her final night at an urgent care center, an opiate-dependent nurse practitioner must overcome her addiction to fight off a gang of violent teen junkies, fiending for the stash of narcotics.
Thank you for all of your feedback! So, to answer some of your questions, the reason the gang targets her and that center is that two teen gang members were there earlier during her shift, making up some story about…
