Espionage is the weapon of choice for husband-and-wife inventors of a new industrial process and a global corporation determined to bury technology that will save millions of lives.

Hi kbfilmworks,

This is a good premise for a possible very good thriller.
As a logline, it could be used for at least 5 or 6 movies I have already seen.
If you tell us a little more about your story, it will be easier to improve this.

As usual, the main usefull informations are:
– who is the hero = (husband, wife or the two?)
– what is his goal = provide a new technology that will save millions of lives
– who is his antagonist = (a global corporation, with or without one of the spouses?)
– what is his flaw = (what hinders him, that maybe the antagonist can use against him?)
– Where is the conflict =(the reason why the global corporation wants to bury this technology)
– What are his personal stakes = (what can lead him to give up, or otherwise to engage more)

Thanks.

I just read your precedent post and it is clearer in my mind.

Your first logline didn’t tell many things about your heroes but told more about your plot.

Would you like this ?

“Espionage is the weapon of choice, as well for the inventors of a technology that could save millions of lives as for the multinational corporation determined to bury it.”

Warning! It becomes a quadrangular relationship Heroes-spy-spy-Antagonist… Matter for a great suspense thriller but very-very difficult to master.

The only example I know is rather messed up: DUPLICITY by Tony Gilroy (Julia Roberts & Clive Owen).
Something better and close to the genre is RUNAWAY JURY by Gary Fleder (Gene Hackman, John Cusack, Dustin Hoffman…)