Big Fish Small Pond
AlexpsmithPenpusher
When a Governors daughter is kidnapped, a remorseful gang banger is recruited as part of an elite team to rescue her.
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“A remorseful gang banger”? Do you mean rapist? I think you’ll find it difficult making your main character sympathetic. (BTW, check your apostrophes).
Hello, I don’t want to be mean to you but- do you actually write this or you are testing a beta version of an automatic logline software? I give you a very good advice, before writing, you should read a lot of logline guides on the internet and maybe buy some books (I recommend Truby’s “anathomy of a story” who has a good chapter about loglines), because in reading your concepts it seems to me that you have to study the very basic of screenwriting- you can’t skip this step or you’l write 1000 logines without writing anything good. Hope this helps!