THE LIGHTHOUSE
William Van Alen?s building of the Chrysler building and the competition to be the first to complete the world?s tallest building.
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Hi,
It might be worth researching Williams character traits and any potential flaws he had and incorporating this into your longline. While most people know what the Chrysler building is and it’s significance, you still want the story to sound compelling, rather than a recount of history.
Something along the lines of:
An obsessive architect destroys all that is good in his life as he becomes consumed by his desire to build the Worlds tallest building – the Chrysler.
Not ideal but focussing it on the character rather than the story adds an element of interest – as we already know the story.
PS I have no idea if he destroyed his life in the process.
I hope this helps
A statement of a premise but not a logline.
What seperates this from a documentary? As wilsondownunder mentioned, you need a human element in there to make us care about this story.
You should add who he’s racing against to build the worlds tallest building, otherwise the logline doesn’t make sense, there have been other worlds tallest buildings, such as the empire state building.
I think you’re spot on in that there is a story here – it’s well known enough to have audience appeal, but it hasn’t really been tackled yet. Still – dpg is totally right. This logline has put the premise into a logline, and as such it’s kind of hard to understand how its story dynamics are going to work.