A scarred American divorcé and a resolute Irish Banker who is terminally ill, race against time to rekindle their once vibrant romance before she dies.

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Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

I also like your suggestion. I might play with that direction, and see what I come up with?

Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

Glad you like the new version. After I thought about it, I wanted a more dramatic struggle, with higher stakes to draw in an audience. Thanks for the feedback!

cicpisces · Logliner · 495 pts

I like that much better. Sounds like a plausible drama people would be willing to watch. It outlines the goal and the obstacle while referencing the ghosts of the past. Good job.

Richiev · Singularity · 58,825 pts

Okay how about something like this:

"After being diagnosed with cancer, a resolute Irish banker seeks out the love of her life only to discover he's scarred from a previous relationship and hesitant to fall in love again."

cicpisces · Logliner · 495 pts

Yeh, I can see the motivation here. Feels like they need more of a concrete goal than rekindle their romance. Maybe you can say what exactly this involves. Only other thing I wasn't sure about was whether the American was scarred physically or mentally, I guess the latter. Not sure the two types are set up for maximum conflict as none of them have anything to lose.